Sunday, October 11, 2009

Jessica Ong -- Yale Workshop Feedback

Dear Mr. Ramsey,

Thank you for everything you have done for our District, especially for setting up this Yale Workshop. Putting this workshop together for us was just amazing and very helpful. I now know what not to do when writing my personal statement, and it was shocking to see what my peers thought about the essays as well. I want to thank Alex Richardson for coming all the way to ECHS to personally speak with us about the application process. It was a pleasure having him at our school, and he not only told us but also showed us that EVERYTHING in the application is important.

We were lucky enough to have him come all the way over from such a prestigious school to talk with us. Mr. Richardson even provided us with a flyer that included three personal statements that all had its own faults. We were all surprised to hear that one of the applicants is now a Yale student; but that reassurance has made me think about how I will write my essay. As Matt stated before, the essay was told in such a personal perspective that the reader was able to see what his/her personality was actually like (even with the poor grammar). It is with no doubt that I now can apply the writing techniques and questions to my essays and share my new knowledge with my peers.

I am very glad to be a part of the Ivy League Connection, and I know that I would not be as prepared as I am now without the help of the ILC. Once again, I thank you, Mrs. Kronenberg, Ms. O'Brian, the School Board, Ms. Larson, Mr. Richardson, and everyone else that has supported us, for spending the time to help us high school students thrive and succeed.

Jessica Ong

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